tpo 18 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, the people we spend our time with them like teachers or friends play a a vital role in our personality and can affect in all aspects of our lives. Many people contend that students are more influenced by their teachers, while others assert they are more influenced by their friends. both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that students are more influenced by their teachers. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibily the paramount reason is that students spend most of their time in school with their friends. Also, after school they are with their friends to do their homewirk or to play game or do some sport. In this case, they gradually influence each other. they learn from each other and imitate their friend's behavior. if the behavior is good our kid will be a good guy, if the behavior is bad, our kid will learn a bad tempor. As a result, children can be very influential in their friend's lives.
Another point springin to mind is that most of the time friends have a lot of things in common. because of these similarities they prefer to stick to each other. So, they start to increase these comon things between theirselves. For example, when I was in high school I had a friend. Unfortunately, my friend was not a polite student. Consequently, she always did bad things and created catastrophic situations. Once I remember that she decided to ruin the school's boards. I decieved by her and after our teacher found that it was our fault she grounded both of us. if I had chose good friend, I would not ground. As you can see, friends can affect us and change our personality.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see that children are most influenced by their friends than anyone because they spend most of their time with each other and have a lot of thongs in common.
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- TPO 42 independent writing 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, so, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55431754875 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5141617496 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495821727019 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0415385908 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3181818182 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3181818182 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229158785381 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664234176348 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852496361556 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153406603548 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688199955877 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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