Some people think that it’s best to encourage children to leave family home as soon as possible. Others believe children should stay at their family home for as long as they like. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Do you know whether children should leave their family home as soon as possible?
Some people think that children should be encouraged to leave home when they reach 18, but others have completely against this point of view. I think it varies in every country and it refers to culture and traditional principles.
now we want to discuss these two opinions.
At first, although children that staying with family as long as they like are less independent, they have lots of benefits such as security, peace, and more facilities. they also don't want to worry about financial expenses such as pay the bills, rent the house or other activities including cooking, cleaning the house and etc..
They can get direct help from their parents in order to solve their daily problems and make new decisions every time that they need. I think these type of children are more relax and little dependent persons.
On the other hand, children that leave home as soon as possible and prepared themselves to be independent are more successful because they accept the risk of facing lots of challenges lonely. They may suffer numerous type of difficulties such as financial problems and homesick and etc.., but they finally find their ways and complete their identity and make their future.
In conclusion, leaving home in younger ages have pros and cons and it refers to personality and family traditional principals. But in my opinion, who leave their family home as soon as possible are more responsible and independent and ready to be a successful part of society.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, i think, in conclusion, such as, you know, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1293.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95402298851 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5339027668 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563218390805 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7688507782 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.75 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399275463807 0.244688304435 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140118955867 0.084324248473 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978960274565 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184791535839 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880803885309 0.056905535591 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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