"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
In the above argument, Author concluded that if skateboarding is prohibited then the business will return to its previously high levels is a controversial one. In this argument, the author fails to provide why there is a relation between the decreasing numbers of shoppers and increasing skateboarding. Additionally why there dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.
First, the author stated that numbers of shoppers decreasing and skateboarding increasing is a weak one. Since author does not provide how many shoppers decreasing and why they decreasing.may be numbers of shop owner are very little compared to the whole central plaza, May be shop owner faces problem in their trade or may be customers in their centraL PLAZA FACING ECONOMIC problem. there is no sufficient data to accept this argument. We know that data provide strong evidence to accept any kind of theory. so this argument is flawed.
Second, central plaza store owners believe that their downfall is only one reason and that is numbers of skateboard user increasing. Is there any rules that if skateboard increased then shopper will be decreased? Increasing the numbers of skateboard usually, depend on many factors and for that there is no reason to decrease shoppers. Additionally, increase in litters and vandalism has several reason that may be there is lacking of security guards or lacking of police station nearby. So this argument could have been much clear if author explicitly sated that what type of correlation between shop owner and skateboarding.
The author also failed to illuminate an appropriate conclusion because of two reasons. Firstly, the author concluded based on weak evidence and secondly prediction in a wrong way without any data. The author could show strong evidence and could prove why prohibiting the skateboarding leads to increased business. it is likely that having a downward trend for business has only one weak reason like increasing skateboarding in the area.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above reason and is therefore , unconvincing. It could be strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts, data, the financial situation in the central plaza and business situation. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 2008 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.216 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.877 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.382 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
... shoppers and increasing skateboarding. Additionally why there dramatic increase in the amo...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...centraL PLAZA FACING ECONOMIC problem. there is no sufficient data to accept this ar...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 9, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...evidence to accept any kind of theory. so this argument is flawed. Second, cen...
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Line 17, column 5, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
... increase in litters and vandalism has several reason that may be there is lacking of securit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pe of correlation between shop owner and skateboarding. The author also failed...
^^^
Line 24, column 12, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... weak evidence and secondly prediction in a wrong way without any data. The author could show...
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Line 24, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...teboarding leads to increased business. it is likely that having a downward trend ...
^^
Line 27, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed for the above reason and is therefore , unconvincing. It could be strengthened...
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Line 27, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... for the above reason and is therefore , unconvincing. It could be strengthened ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44935064935 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95804102602 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483116883117 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0166412216 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9047619048 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 5.15768463074 465% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282591548178 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817207575477 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891307850735 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788200409073 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807136642134 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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