During the last decade, it is reported that the number of obese children has been rising significantly by 20 percentage to be precise. In this essay, I will give some main reasons for this issue to be happening and also the final outcomes.
Let us start by looking at the causes of the increasing obesity rate in young children. First of all, the prevalence of fast food TV commercials has triggered people's inner desire to consume more junk food. Not only these types of food are affordable, but also fast food stores are placed everywhere in rural and urban areas, so it will be easy for people to grab a bite at any time of the day. For example, McDonald's and KFC introduce their new lunch set for kids to be taken on the go while parents are driving their kids to school. Moreover, the advancement in technology also a factor which leads to the situation of a rising in the number of overweight children. In the past, the quality of food used to be higher than nowadays because of the shortage of land for agricultural purpose. The same acreage now can only culminate, for instance, ten tomato trees while 20 or 30 can be grown in the past with the same nourishing conditions. This issue will lead to further degradation in food quality, higher the price for organic foods and higher the amount of artificial nutrients and non-beneficial fats in nowadays' food. Consequently, every household would need to make a careful decision with their meal plan.
While the percentage of overweight children is rising, the risk of cardiovascular collapse or gout also increases too. Children are getting weaker so their immune systems are not as good as of those children's 20 or 30 years ago. Furthermore, unhealthy children tend not to be excel in school, hence they were not able to make contributions to the society or their families in later life. In general, obesity is one of the main factors that could destroy a whole generation.
In conclusion, there are many reasons which lead to the overweight problem in western society. The dire consequences are in a clear vision and we must do something about it to keep our children out of misery.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1107, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...icial nutrients and non-beneficial fats in nowadays food. Consequently, every household wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73066666667 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70651034031 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0974196781 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.352941176 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131336445675 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453808767916 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402302298819 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892581727016 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272301235496 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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