Your school has received a gift of money. What do you think is the best way for your school to
spend this money? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Many schools battling with financial issues. They need money and when they get some they are wondering how to use that amount of money in their schools. Even though so many people believe that the best way of spending that amount of money is by using it in some physical activity and invest some money to facilitate their gym because of the fact that sport is so vital for students with any age range but I my point of view, the best way of using this money is by using it on buying some books and harvest them to library of school and I support these statement with two important reasons.
First, It there is no harm to buy some books because of the fact that books are going to remain for a long time and everyone can use them whenever they want. For example, when I was at high school, I bought one book about the importance of using chemical substance in scientific experiments but I did not need them at that point. In the other word I bought wrong book because of the fact that I got baffled and bought the wrong book. I did not use that book for several years but when I went to university that book was one of the important subject that I have to study for the first semester so I use that book in that time. For the examples like this, I think buying book for school could be really good idea.
Secondly, books can give the students wider range of understanding about what is happening in the world. The limited time that student are spending in school is not enough for them to answer all of their question and they have to find some other resources to fulfill their crave for understanding. For instance, my friend John in college was so passionate about math but our class in school was not good enough for him. Therefore he used to go to library and read some books about mathematics and that was so pleasing for him. This example could clearly states that if schools spend much money on buying some book that would be so beneficial for both school and students.
To sum up, in my opinion is better for schools to invest some of their money to buy some books and harvest them to the library of school for the use of students. In this case the intellectual ability if their students are going to increase over time and as a result they are going to send some bright students into higher level of education.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 327, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...vest some money to facilitate their gym because of the fact that sport is so vital for students with any...
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Line 1, column 547, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this statement' or 'these statements'?
Suggestion: this statement; these statements
...them to library of school and I support these statement with two important reasons. First, I...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
..., It there is no harm to buy some books because of the fact that books are going to remain for a long ti...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
.... In the other word I bought wrong book because of the fact that I got baffled and bought the wrong book...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... in school was not good enough for him. Therefore he used to go to library and read some ...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...d some books about mathematics and that was so pleasing for him. This example could clearly sta...
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Line 5, column 555, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
...ing for him. This example could clearly states that if schools spend much money on buy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35632183908 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22074676874 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429885057471 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.0106970092 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209559254922 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881982865727 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625111927302 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151853956306 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045026493037 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 58.1214874552 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.6 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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