The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria.
"Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Although this solution may annoy a few tourists in the short term, it will reduce the number of people using the beaches and will raise money for replenishing the sand. Replenishing the sand, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia, will help protect buildings along our shores, thereby reducing these buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. And since the areas along the shore will be more attractive as a result, the beaches will be preserved and the area's tourist industry will improve over the long term."
The above article appeared as a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria. The arguer recommends that people should be charged for using beaches. The first argument that arguer has stated is that by charging the people for using beaches , it will raise money for replenishing the sand. The second argument presented by the arguer in support of his stand is example of nearby island of Batia where they did this process to protect the buildings. Further, the author states that beaches would be more attractive and they would be preserved. In addition to this Tria's tourist industry will also be flourished. However, the statements presented by the author are vague and unconvincing.
The first argument that author has stated that people should be charged for using the beaches is a negative one.The arguer fails to understand or estimate the consequences that tria might face after this decision. On addition, the arguer has not mentioned about how much will the price increase. If, the charge is high that people might not come and if the charges are less than they it is not sufficient to raise the funds for replenishing the sand. Further, the arguer has not mentioned that charges are applicable for tourists only or also for the people living there.If the nearby residents are going on beach for a walk then this might be disapproving for them.
FInally, the arguer states that this decision will not only protect the building but also keep the beaches and will be more attractive. The arguer on this statment seems to be very confused. If the arguer wants to keep the beach than he should banned the tourisim.If he wants to protect the buildings then he should focus on the problem first and not to encourage or focusing in tourisim.
All the argument that are given by the arguer are not providing concrete explanation.However, if the arguer had given proper evidences than the argument would have been more convincing.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.706 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.372 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.905 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le should be charged for using beaches. The first argument that arguer has stated i...
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Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...by charging the people for using beaches , it will raise money for replenishing th...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... raise money for replenishing the sand. The second argument presented by the arguer...
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Line 1, column 546, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... would be more attractive and they would be preserved. In addition to this Trias ...
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Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...for using the beaches is a negative one.The arguer fails to understand or estimate ...
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Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rstand or estimate the consequences that tria might face after this decision. On ...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: ON_ADDITION[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in'?
Suggestion: In
...t tria might face after this decision. On addition, the arguer has not mentioned ...
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Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...nd if the charges are less than they it is not sufficient to raise the funds for r...
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Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...nly or also for the people living there.If the nearby residents are going on beach...
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Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en this might be disapproving for them. FInally, the arguer states that this dec...
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Line 6, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...his statment seems to be very confused. If the arguer wants to keep the beach than...
^^
Line 6, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...each than he should banned the tourisim.If he wants to protect the buildings then ...
^^
Line 6, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t to encourage or focusing in tourisim. All the argument that are given by the a...
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Line 8, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... are not providing concrete explanation.However, if the arguer had given proper evidenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90690690691 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59313242231 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.487756015 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.933333333 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151515020078 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661425763748 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810220130446 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872273512355 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779470900797 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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