There has much discussion about whether parents should provide their children with materials and freedom to do what they like or not .As far as I am concerned, it will exert an adverse effect on children and bring some results.
It is undeniable that such raising children pattern tend to have unfavorable influence. The root reason lies in the fact that those spoiled children will have a unhappy life when they go to school and they are likely to imposed much pressure. This is because families are becoming smaller with less children , parents always satisfy their kids in material way and give them to behave in pleasure ways .Thus, those spoiled kids do not know how to tolerant and compromise with others ,which means that they have no friends.In a long term, spoiled children are more likely be haunted by pessimism and distress ,which damage their psychological health.
Also , many results are possible happened to society and kids themselves. As to the former, those spoiled kids may pose a threat to society stability. This is because when they grew up they cannot earn money to still satisfy their desires ,they may conduct robbery and some illegal ways to gain money. As a result, our society may under risks. When it comes to the children themselves, because they can do what they like ,so they do not control themself in a proper way. When they grow up ,they may lose in the future career.
In a conclusion , I firmly believed that parents give children what they want and what they like do will exert a disadvantage effect and bring some bad results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, still, thus, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81180811808 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39269137758 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557195571956 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.7474447833 49.4020404114 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.545454545 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6363636364 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424547842574 0.244688304435 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16240069417 0.084324248473 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111383264904 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28483410687 0.151304729494 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216690750719 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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