We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening th

The author of the given prompt suggests the Board of Directors of Monarch Books store to start a café in the book store in order to gain more customers than the current numbers. The prompt is flawed in certain levels because the assertion made in the recommendation is based on certain unfounded assumptions which are not properly substantiated. Hence, the author of the prompt might hold water if there are no proper examples substantiating these assumptions are given but inturn can dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the conclusion made.

Firstly, the author suggests to close the child...

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests closing'.
Suggestion: suggests closing
...onclusion made. Firstly, the author suggests to close the children book section mentioning ha...
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Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...e 10 number got decreased. It certainly do not mean that the reduction in the tota...
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Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... who go for the children's novels. Hence if the author further fails to consider...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 647, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...range of book selection. There might be a alienating of the customer numbers lead...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tive conclusion in the recommendation. But, even though it might seem viable th...
^^^
Line 7, column 617, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ady attained the stability, which might effect the café if opened in the Monarch store...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e café, he might rethink his assertion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93641618497 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79842158778 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418111753372 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 787.5 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1558667246 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.1 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.95 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315958927294 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106088695538 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104578266475 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184271594804 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908119730444 0.0628817314937 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 519 350
No. of Characters: 2462 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.773 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.744 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.599 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.188 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5