We are working to prepare a bright future for ourselves. In this context, being successful in our job is very significant since it determines our life standards. There are two controversial notions about being successful in a job which are relate well to people and studying hard in school. In my view, studying hard is way more important than get on well with people. My opinion is based on personal, educational and professional reasons.
Professionally, I believe that every job needs to be done by the one who is the best at it. Because only with this way it is possible to take action in business life. Nobody needs to have a sincere and very close relationship with their workmates however, they must do the work which they assigned to. I would never want to work with a person who does not have enough education about the job. Because I assume that, a hardworking workmate could lessen the burden on me and increase my work efficiency.
Educationally, many people study at universities/collages to have the job they want in their future and try to lead the field. As a result, they expect to get the job they can handle well. Companies/Firms hire them because they are the one who knows about the job and can solve the problems which can be occurred during the operation time. The reason of them to be hired is not about their talk abilities but about their knowledge. So, the education and studying hard is the way to achieve the job goals.
Personally, If I would have a business/firm or a factory, I would choose the one who has more knowledge and experience. According to me, knowledge and experience has more value than a sweet talk since only talking does not make money. There is an old saying that "Empty vessels make the most sound" and I absolutely rely on it. That is why, I would not want to waste my time and money for someone who is not knowledgeable about the subject.
As a conclusion, get on well with people is important in daily life but unfortunately it can not be replaced with knowledge. Therefore, studying hard is more important than relating people well to be successful in future job.
- TOEFL essay: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only movies that can teach us something about real life are worth watching. 73
- The advantages and disadvantages of online shopping 56
- The similarities between the internet and television 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'related'.
Suggestion: related
...out being successful in a job which are relate well to people and studying hard in sch...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... done by the one who is the best at it. Because only with this way it is possible to ta...
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Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rd is the way to achieve the job goals. Personally, If I would have a business/f...
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Line 7, column 121, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
... who has more knowledge and experience. According to me, knowledge and experience has more valu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, well, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6914893617 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88413653441 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481382978723 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9614669026 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.0 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95238095238 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228873056259 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794384314677 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955131591735 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156128871766 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111948920627 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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