Nowadays, people spend a considerable amount of their time at work, so the job became an inseparable part of their lives. I believe the income of an occupation is not necessarily the most valuable feature of it. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a tedious job with a high salary can not bring satisfaction in the long run. We all have experienced that when we enjoy something, the effort put on that work doesn't look too much. In contrast, doing things which are not appealing will make us exhausted, and even after finishing them, there would be no satisfaction. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Our university forces students to take an internship course which allows them to prepare themselves for the real job opportunities in the future and improve their resumes. I had several choices in front of me, and all of them were good in different aspects. I narrowed down my options to two. One of them was a big company that offered a high wage while the other one paid much less, but what they did there was very intriguing for me. After talking with my seniors, I decided to pick the second one, and I was satisfied with that because doing such an exciting job gave me self-confidence and made me feel valuable.
Secondly, I believe more salary requires more effort which yields to more working hours. In my perspective, there are a lot of facets of our lives, which an occupation can't fulfill them. We work to have a better experience, but excessive attempt to earn more money is wasting the valuable gift of life. For instance, I have a friend named Ali, who is a doctor and works in double shifts every day. He doesn't give himself a break, and he is always busy. Even though he is rich, he isn't satisfied with his life and thinks he will find true happiness in an extra these shifts.
On the other hand, I have another pal who is also a physician, but she has a whole life beside her occupation. She goes to the gym, watch movies, and travels and still is a famous doctor in the city. She doesn't earn as much as Ali, but in my point of view, she is a more successful person than Ali because she doesn't define herself with the income and tries to experience other aspects of life.
In conclusion, I believe that wage is not the most crucial characteristic of a job. This is because I think being happy with a job and growing different parts of personality alongside the job is more valuable than earning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49339207048 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57710757178 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54845814978 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9770423438 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6956521739 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69565217391 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111385467043 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0308634627193 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348085818964 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699589605371 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415161403534 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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