There is no doubt that nowadays, children's education plays a crucial role in people's lives. No one can deny the direct and indirect effect of the impact of teacher's approach on students' learning. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is an essential part that the governments should allocate some funds to enhance it. I firmly believe that if some training courses are funded, there will be more sophisticated teachers who will have a great number of advantages for children's education. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve the two of the most outstanding reasons which will aptly elucidate my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that the effect of teachers' method for teaching on children's learning is impressive. In other words, the more professional the teachers are, the more enthusiasm to educate will be created in students. By considering this fact, the governments are obliged to allocate a considerable budget to grow up the skilled tutors by providing some improving courses.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that in every field growing professional individuals, is one of the most fundamental points of efficiency and prosperity in societies. In fact, although the subjects that are taught to students in these grades are generally less complicated, the educating approach enjoys a high level of influence on their education process in the future. Therefore, the teacher's education must be directly considered as an undeniable effect on children's education.
To make a long story short, if you take to account all the reasons mentioned above, it can be concluded the most significant areas in which the government ought to consider a determined fund, is to provide an infrastructure for teachers to become more adept. By doing so, the astute and creative children will be certainly delivered to society. Consequently, it is highly recommended that the government should create some institutes for improving tutors' knowledge.
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. 76
- TPO 22 Integrated Writing Task 45
- Independent Writing The government wants to fund one of the following areas to improve children's education. Which one do you think is better? Why? -hire more teachers to teach in a small class - make preschool education before kindergarten mandatory - pr 76
- Independent Writing The government wants to fund one of the following areas to improve children's education. Which one do you think is better? Why? -hire more teachers to teach in a small class - make preschool education before kindergarten mandatory - pr 76
- it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...iewpoint. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...n process in the future. Therefore, the teachers education must be directly considered a...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, in fact, no doubt, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34049079755 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02349594349 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564417177914 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9187856725 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.357142857 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212097212327 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07064586079 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302317383868 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132122786266 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157382700941 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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