Thoroughout out history, government play a prevailing role in every individual's society. The inevitable question which has always caused heated debate among academicians is whether government spend more money is support of the arts than in support of athletics. Although some might maintain that supporting art is prior to spend money for athletics, I firmly contend that they should spend that for athletics. I n the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that supporting the athletics encourage the great number of people in one community to get involved in such activities more. In fact, when people considered position of a champion of a Olympic whether famous or wealthy, they do that with double enthusiastic. For example, by watching famous athletics on TV, young adult encouraged to participated in sport club. In this way, they not only gain healthy body and good shape , but also improve their social activity. Therefore, athletic can have positive impact on a variety range of people across the country.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that by supporting athletics government can gain a lot of money from their fame and validity. In other words, the role of athletics is a significant contributor to economically improvement in every society. For example, In our country government obtain a lot of money only by transferring its champions to another country for participating in friendly matches . This example clearly demonstrate that government is beneficiary from their champion.
In conclusion, I strongly believed that government should support athletics financially because of their major part in encouraging other individuals in playing sport in country and obtain more money from their fame. If every government develops its budget for sport, we will sure see a livelier and richer community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98824502853 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576666666667 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8873015549 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269051284855 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824233734537 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778861791293 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161685624074 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626313976525 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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