Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In fact, no one can deny the importance and effect of the events happening each day. Nowadays, social media and communication center spread all the events with considerable details. An important question which is raised here is whether knowing about the happening events around the world is important or not. Were i in the position to decide, I would concur the latter idea? In ensuing lines, I elaborate on my idea with reasonable reasons.
To begin with, my main reason is that pay attention to the events happening around the world can be time-consuming for people. To be more specific, in today's world, there are too many social media and communication devices which spread every news with detail from any part of the world. By considering the amount of the news, following events happening around the world needs a significant effort and time. To shed light on this matter, recent research held by the University of Tehran held that most of the people who following and pay attention to the events happening around the world spend 6-7 hours on the news center. Therefore, it's not necessary for the people to follow each news around them and it would be a better choice to spend less time on social media.
Last but not least, the second reason is that knowing about the events happening around the world can be disappointing for the people. To explain more, people who pay attention to news deliberately compare its effects on their tasks. By considering that the majority of the news is about the war or increasing price or in the other word they are bad news. It can put negative pressure on people and event disappoint them. Not only this news is disappointing but also are stressful for the people. Take my friend as an example. He recently stars a job and put all his effort to be successful in his business. But, as he follows and pays too much attention to the news about the increasing and decreasing price of dollars which is not effecting his business, he becomes disappointment due to the fact that price of dollars will effect his job in the future.
To sum up, taking all the above reasons into the account, I agree with the statement that it is not important to know about the events happening around the world. I wish, people have more attention on their task and not pay attention too much on the news.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 827, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... to the fact that price of dollars will effect his job in the future. To sum up, ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, in fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69024390244 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56138092031 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460975609756 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5514063824 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.15 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225655723858 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794853887441 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847064477603 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168374217497 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459607971308 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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