the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievement of its rules, artists or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Can the greatness of a nation indicate only by the general welfare of its people without measuring achievements in scientists and others area? On one hand, welfare of countries’ people can express their happiness. On the other hand, developments in some area especially in scientific and art realm can also indicate countries’ thrive and greatness.
General welfare can indicate a nation’s greatness because it satisfies the basic desires of the citizen both in physiological and psychological needs. For instance, it is hard to say a country filled with citizens who are threatened by starvation a great country which means the greatness of a nation needs some basic material needs like enough food and high employment rate. Only when satisfying the lower floor, some other development like self-actualization can take place through the Maslow’s hierarchy of needs. Meanwhile, psychological needs like education and art pursuing are also vital to citizens’ happiness. Education delivered to youth manifest what a country can be in the future and influence the quality of the nation in next generation. And art pursing is the natural of people to find beautiful which can greatly increase the happiness of the citizen. When the government is willing to spend money on building art museums and holding exhibitions, it usually means that this country is trying to satisfy their spirit pursuing, which is a strong indicator of nation greatness.
Scientific and artistic achievements can build the international influence of a country which can also indicate the greatness of that nation. For example, James Cameron, a great film director who used 3D technology so astonished in a movie called Avatar. In this movie, he brought the world’s audiences to an unprecedented beautiful scene. So many following movies’ directors are trying to follow his footsteps and there is no doubt that Avatar is a milestone in the history of art. Only the great artistic creation atmosphere in Cameron’s nation can bring the movie to the world which indicate the greatness of the nation. In scientific field, Yuan Longping, who produce hybrid rice which solve the famine problem in the world to a great extent. His achievement is a great progress of humankind, helping us to consider more things rather than finding food for live. There is no doubt that the fund of the government and some genius scientists the nation cultivated is a crucial apart for producing the great invention.
In sum, both general welfare of nation’s people like education and art pursuing and achievements in all the realms can show the greatness of a country. Split them apart will not find the comprehension greatness of an exact country.
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- the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievement of its rules, artists or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 782, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'great progress'.
Suggestion: great progress
...d to a great extent. His achievement is a great progress of humankind, helping us to consider mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29748283753 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10576648215 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480549199085 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4831962351 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228515047289 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081648006282 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910854849861 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158976853045 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322655023373 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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