The following chart shows the percentage of workers by age in four different industries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The following chart shows the percentage of workers, by age, in four different industries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates data of the proportion of employed people in different industries, with a further classification by 6 different age groups. The percentage of workers in hospitality and retail industries declines by people are aging while the share of people working in education and agriculture industries is the highest in the middle age groups.

In 15-24 age group, the percentages of workers in education and agriculture industries are the smallest, at over 5% and 10% respectively, but this figures peaked in 35-44 and 45-54 age groups (at 30% and 25% respectively). The proportion of people who work in education industry shows a sharp decline after 55 age, reaching under 5% in age group of 65 and over. Also, the percentage of those who work in agriculture industry drops steadily after 45 age (to 10% in 65 and over age group).

The most of people (about 35%) in 15-24 age group work in retail industry but this figure decline steeply in 25-34 age group by almost 15 percentage points (reaching 20%). The higher percentage of workers in hospitality industry corresponds to the younger age. This percentage is at about 30% in the youngest age group (15-24) and reaches the lowest level of below 5% in 65 and over age group (decreasing moderately by almost 25%).

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ries, with a further classification by 6 different age groups. The percentage of ...
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Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...to 10% in 65 and over age group. The most of people about 35% in 15-24 age group work in re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1057.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89351851852 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87111325512 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 321.3 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.1209110066 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.125 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142916052829 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886435543971 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309051328579 0.0843802449381 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115864853353 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241657380481 0.0819641961636 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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