The following appeared in an article in the Grandview Beacon.
"For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Given such developments, some city commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting, and they recommend that funding for the symphony be eliminated from next year's budget."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author states that due to recent increment in the private contributions to the Grandview symphony, it is a prudent decision to cancel public funding because the symphony can make a profit on its own.This argument may seem convincing when give a cursory thought, but it engages in several logical fallacies and unsound reasoning.
First,it is mentioned that there has been a 200 percent increase in private contributions. but no data are presented about the amount of fundings in the previous years. if it has been near zero, then 200 percent increment would not be a noticeable change. Furthermore, the author correlates higher attendance at concerts with new private fundings. This change could be attributed to many other reasons such as the new change in the new environment of the concert, new musicians and better plays which have encouraged people to attend in the concerts.
Second, how can we say assuredly that higher prices of tickets will lead to higher profits? are people eager to pay more for tickets? The conclusion of the authors would be rendered void if people experience an economic downturn and therefore won’t be able to afford expensive tickets. hence, surveys must be done to examine the eagerness of people to pay more for the tickets.
Third,there is no data presented regarding the government fundings. can we say certainly that removing public funding inflict no damage on the performance of the concert? t may be the case that symphony relies heavily on government funds to pay for the cost of its maintenance, musician salaries and many other performance costs, hence, cancelling the government donations will not only improve the development of the concert but also lead to its bankrupcy. therefore, sufficient data is required to investigate the financial resources of the concert.
In summary, the argument seems to lack seriously in persuasiveness and cogency. sufficient valid data and statistics with regards to financial resources of the concert, its performance and people's opinions is essential for reaching a tenable conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1706 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.801 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.971 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.751 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, third, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27927927928 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92863470333 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558558558559 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.2022480347 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.875 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136388386202 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409407114795 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399557344255 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0704943163072 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323248295279 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.