57. The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that the main benefit of studying history is to understand that people living now are not much different from people living in earlier times. I concede that people of today and people of the past are facing almost the same questions. However, I would like to argue that the manifestations of and the solutions to these problems have changed enormously. Moreover, I contend that the main benefit of the study of the history is to learn human’s initiatives in investigating the outer-world and in developing our cultures.
Admittedly, if we consider the problems that keep haunting humankind throughout the history, the speaker’s argument might hold true. Humans are constantly fighting against several problems: conflicts between different groups, paradoxes between technological developments and environmental protection, social segregation, protections of minorities groups and etc. No matter how advanced the technologies are, and no matter we lived in the Renaissances or lived today, we cannot avoid these questions. In retrospect of Chinese two-thousand-years history, we found that almost all dynasties were overthrown by peasant uprising. By comparing the environmental problems in different countries, China and the United Kingdom both experience a period of smog caused by heavy industries. After recognizing the insatiable character of capitalism, that has already provoked several times of economic crisis in twentieth century, the world met again a great economic depression in 2008. The same errors that human repeated again and again seem to prove the speaker’s argument. History seems like circuitous and humans of today make same errors as humans of earlier times.
Even though the main problems that humans encounter are the same, the manifestations of and the resolutions to these problems have overwhelmingly changed. First, compared with the past these problems are manifested in a more subtle way. Take the problem of social segregation, which exists along humans’ history, as an example. In the past, the upper class and the lower-class people had different wearing rules and they can be distinguished at a glance. In ancient Rome, social segregation leaded to geographical zones that poor people could only move in limited areas. In contrast, today the limit between different social classes is obscure. The clear geographical segregation have disappeared and the social segregation is presented in a subtle way, such as the lower-classes’ difficulty to enter élite education, the upper-classes’ control over scarce resources and the information barriers between the upper and the lower. Second difference between people of the past and people of today is how they people tackle these problems. To respond to national conflicts, people of today can apply a more peaceful way such as the trade war and the economic barriers employed by China and America. In contrast, in ancient times, conflicts between two ethnic groups often provoked direct physical battles. Through analyzing both the manifestations of and the resolutions to the constant problems, this paragraph aims proving that people do change over the times and people keep working on new methods to resolve these problems.
Finally, I am not favor the argument that the the main role of studying history. Had the speaker consider humans’ accomplishments in science and arts, he or she might correct his argument into that the main benefit of studying history is to understand humankind’s non-stop initiatives in discovering both the outer world and the inner world. The European culture of landscape, which investigates the evolution of the relationship between nature and human, illustrates adequately my point. In ancient times, while humans were weak, they were afraid of nature. Thus, the ancient Greek garden was a small fountain in the backyard. In Middle Ages, with the development in physics and geometry, humans were stronger and intended to control over nature. Correspondingly, the French classic gardens were regular and symmetrical. Today, with the increasingly severe environmental problems, people appeal to a harmonious relationship with nature. Consequently, ecological gardens appear. This evolution of landscape culture can be considered as a silhouette of human history. The outer world, the nature is the same, but people’s attitudes and views about them are evolving. Wring our history is just as constructing a wall. Each generation built a thin layer of understanding based on the understanding of our predecessors and finally the understanding is deepened, and the history is evolved. In conclude, the main benefit of studying history is to understand humankind’s non-stop initiatives in constructing and enriching our cultures.
To sum up, the speaker’s argument holds true only when we consider the several big social and environmental problems that keep haunting humankind. However, human culture has changed enormously with the respect of resolutions to these problems. Furthermore, the main benefit of studying history is to understand and to confirm humans’ initiatives in positively investigating the world. This spirit can help us to tackle the problems of the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ation, protections of minorities groups and etc. No matter how advanced the technologies...
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Message: Use simply 'repeated'.
Suggestion: repeated
...ion in 2008. The same errors that human repeated again and again seem to prove the speaker&apo...
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Line 5, column 577, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eople could only move in limited areas. In contrast, today the limit between diffe...
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Line 5, column 743, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a subtle way" with adverb for "subtle"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...and the social segregation is presented in a subtle way, such as the lower-classes' diffic...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'favored'.
Suggestion: favored
...ve these problems. Finally, I am not favor the argument that the the main role of ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...nally, I am not favor the argument that the the main role of studying history. Had the ...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...nally, I am not favor the argument that the the main role of studying history. Had the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, in contrast, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 115.0 58.6224719101 196% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4481.0 2235.4752809 200% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 799.0 442.535393258 181% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60826032541 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.31663314986 4.55969084622 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23270934287 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 364.0 215.323595506 169% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455569461827 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1378.8 704.065955056 196% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.38483146067 365% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 41.0 20.2370786517 203% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.2760741944 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.292682927 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.487804878 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09756097561 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 20.0 5.13820224719 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191868684035 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486070161607 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732046658663 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132461869767 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947019765377 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 205.0 100.480337079 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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