Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
A person's life is governed by his/her dream. Dreams are always selfless and makes a person successful when he/she passionately follows it. History is testimony to this. If we closely look into the life of famous persona we will see that they were all successful as they chased their dreams despite all hurdles. Therefore more emphasis should be on following dreams rather than on worthy goals.
A child goes to school early in his/her life. After sometime he/she is asked to have a goal in his/her life. But more often than not parents enforce their goals on their children. What so happens is that a boy who likes art a lot is forced to take up a lot of math courses so that he becomes an engineer when he grows up. All the dreams of becoming a great artist dies down and the boy becomes a distressed engineer. There are countless other examples like this roaming around us.
Moreover as the world is competitive, therefore, an artistically inclined child always keeps his/her artistic talent as hobby. He/she is not eager to take up this talent as his/her career. They don't think of this as worthy goals. Instead money generating goals are considered as worthy, especially for boys. These goals also receive more respect from family, relatives, friends and others.
Therefore, the way of choosing a career hasn't changed much even after the progressive growth in the world. The world is turning more materialistic than artistic. Hence peace is evading people's lives.
Since a dream feeds a soul. A person should always cultivate his natural talent and go for it. Even if he/she has to sacrifice a lot of things he/she shouldn't give up on dreams. Only then they will be successful as well as will be able to contribute towards the nation and the country.
Therefore, the way of choosing a career hasn't changed much even after the progressive growth in the world. The world is turning more materialistic than artistic. Hence peace is evading people's lives.
Since a dream feeds a soul. A person should always cultivate his natural talent and go for it. Even if he/she has to sacrifice a lot of things he/she shouldn't give up on dreams. Only then they will be successful as well as will be able to contribute towards the nation and the country.
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- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish. 50
- "The desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large. "Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples f 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 3, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
A persons life is governed by his/her dream. Drea...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...llows it. History is testimony to this. If we closely look into the life of famous...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...hased their dreams despite all hurdles. Therefore more emphasis should be on following dr...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d goes to school early in his/her life. After sometime he/she is asked to have a goal...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...mples like this roaming around us. Moreover as the world is competitive, therefore,...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... up this talent as his/her career. They dont think of this as worthy goals. Instead ...
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Suggestion: Instead,
...hey dont think of this as worthy goals. Instead money generating goals are considered a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...Therefore, the way of choosing a career hasnt changed much even after the progressive...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...rning more materialistic than artistic. Hence peace is evading peoples lives. Si...
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce peace is evading peoples lives. Since a dream feeds a soul. A person should a...
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Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ivate his natural talent and go for it. Even if he/she has to sacrifice a lot of things...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...has to sacrifice a lot of things he/she shouldnt give up on dreams. Only then they will ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...Therefore, the way of choosing a career hasnt changed much even after the progressive...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...rning more materialistic than artistic. Hence peace is evading peoples lives. Si...
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce peace is evading peoples lives. Since a dream feeds a soul. A person should a...
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Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ivate his natural talent and go for it. Even if he/she has to sacrifice a lot of things...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...has to sacrifice a lot of things he/she shouldnt give up on dreams. Only then they will ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 12.9106741573 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82864450128 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49634710659 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460358056266 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8168543735 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.9333333333 118.986275619 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.0333333333 23.4991977007 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129015132716 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039580484601 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491562262597 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722521605799 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306169448069 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 14.1392134831 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.