The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achived high grades in respective courses

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The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achived high grades in respective courses.

The bar charts compare the percentage of male and female students who achieved high grades in five different subjects in the year of 1996 and 2000.

The largest proportion of boys (about 45%) performed well in Humanities in 2000, increasing remarkably from around 22% in 1996. By contrast, a declining trend was seen in girls in the same subject, dropping from just under 35% to 25%. A larger percentage of male students achieved high scores in Arts in 2000 than 4 years ago, standing at more than 20% in 2000, which more than doubled from less than 10% in 1996. Still, the figure for their female counterparts shrank from 30% to 25%.

The subject which most girls are good at was languages in both years. Although the percentage decreasing from 45% to around 31%, this figure was still larger than that of boys’, which remained unchanged at about 21% during the period. An upward pattern was shown in Maths in terms of girls, with the figure increased three-fold from 5% to 15% while the proportion of girls achieved good grades in Science remained roughly unchanged around 10%. In contrast, the figures for boys in these two subjects both experienced a noticeable decline.

Overall, boys outperformed girls in Humanities during the 4-year period while girls showed an overwhelmingly advantage in Languages. The gaps between male and female students in the other three subjects were narrowing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 92, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('overwhelmingly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('advantage') instead of another adjective.
...ng the 4-year period while girls showed an overwhelmingly advantage in Languages. The gaps between male and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, still, well, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1182.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 234.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5973802105 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.831948045 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.454545455 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.23603664747 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152881842976 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060765571299 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04705746514 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103738320609 0.15604864568 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291321972483 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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