An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia — the scent of lavender flowers — has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
The author of the argument claims that lavender flower scent cures insomnia based on the study performed on the volunteers. However, he did not mention the other factors like the health conditions of the volunteers. He also fails to indicate the effect of medication in the result of the study. Also we have to know about the controlled environment to clearly decide the result of the study.
The argument says that 30 volunteers participated in the study. But he didn’t mention anything about their current health condition which may have effect on their sleep. This is a crucial point that we need to remember while analyzing the results of the study. Also the argument fails to state the daily routines of the volunteers. Did they follow their usual routine during the three week period of the study? Or were they provided with specific routines by the researchers? This is an important question that needs to be answered.
The argument also says that the volunteers took their usual sleeping medication on the first week and although they slept soundly, they woke up tired. And they discontinued the medication at the beginning of second week and felt even more tired after waking up. This indicates that medication may have some effects on their sleep. If they didn’t take medication in the first week, the result might have been different.
Another point we have to consider is that whether the volunteers took any medications in the third week. The argument doesn’t mention anything about medication in the third week, which we should know in order to analyze the study.
The argument comes into a decision that lavender cures insomnia in a short period of time. To come to this decision, we need more rigorous study. The study was performed in a controlled environment, which may not resemble the normal environment in which people sleep. To come to the decision the argument reaches, we have to perform the study for a longer time, where the controlled environment shouldn’t be present. Also, to claim that lavender scent cures insomnia we need to perform the study without lavender scented pillow. Otherwise the claim will be invalid.
Therefore, to say that lavender cures insomnia, we have to perform the study under various conditions for a longer period of time. We also need to know some other factors regarding the volunteers to reach into conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 401 350
No. of Characters: 1926 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.475 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.803 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.494 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.04 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.87 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... medication in the result of the study. Also we have to know about the controlled en...
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Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing about their current health condition which may have effect on their sleep. Th...
^^
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ile analyzing the results of the study. Also the argument fails to state the daily r...
^^^^
Line 9, column 50, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
...ent comes into a decision that lavender cures insomnia in a short period of time. To ...
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Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...that lavender cures insomnia in a short period of time. To come to this decision, we need more...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 535, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
... study without lavender scented pillow. Otherwise the claim will be invalid. Therefore,...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 33, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
...alid. Therefore, to say that lavender cures insomnia, we have to perform the study ...
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Line 11, column 116, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...y under various conditions for a longer period of time. We also need to know some other factor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04785894207 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64479788865 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425692695214 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.534901388 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.16 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.88 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188796644068 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566867556671 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063125822399 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102350820507 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467376825111 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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