Often when people move overseas where the culture is different from their own, they tend to gravitate towards people from their own country who speak the same language and share the same culture.
Discuss some of the problems related to this lack of integration into the new community and offer some solutions to help alleviate the problem.
Todays, using other country language is made uncomfortable and feel too hard in other country. Many immigrants prepare other country language when they would move to other country. People feel hard to a speak second language and feel hard to join with different culture people. I want to discuss how making harmony with other countries people.
People feel comfortable when they are using mother tongue. So, many immigrants tend to usually speak their own language with their friends. Furthermore, people feel hard to learn and using a second language with local people. People usually avoid their speaking chance, when they have speaking opportunity with local people or their neighbor. Many immigrants already has their culture community apps on their phone and same country friends. They usually talk and message through a phone app with their friends. Even though people looking for same country culture people when they want to date with someone.
In my opinion, there are several solutions. Making new friends is the best way to harmony with local people. Only talking with compatriots can cause to isolate some immigrants from local people. Also, I think many immigrants have to open mind about second language and different culture. And people have to close relationship with their neighbors and local people. Small talk with their neighbor can cause harmony with other culture people. Furthermore, great place to making a friend is in their school or college. And going to a local event with their new local friends can good start great relationship.
In conclusion, many immigrants tend to comfortable circumstance when they make a friend. Even, they live in other country. In my point of view, they have to try to speak with local people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, second, so, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19298245614 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43238132631 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435087719298 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.5316905251 49.4020404114 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.2727272727 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9545454545 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276544541287 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962108729573 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708190567705 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168867858087 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980203050187 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 50.2224549098 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.93 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.58950901804 76% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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