TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

There have appeared endless discussions over planning and organization ability. Sociologists argue that in our complex modern life, it is crucial for young people to acquire the ability to plan and organize. Personally, I approve of this statement.

On one hand, what takes my priority is personal happiness. It is well noted that with the capability of planning and organizing, young people are able to do their work in a more systematic manner. Subsequently, they do better work, and their work efficiency is greatly ameliorated. It follows that their work brings in much sweeter and flowering results, and high achievements later in life. This ability would surely aid them to earn great success, and thus bringing them joy and happiness. More interestingly, it is possible that the complexity of modern life poses a number of difficulties for young people. Planning and organizing decently is of great help for them to work smartly in order to overcome their issues. For instance, they are supposed plan and organizing their schedule and work wisely to deal with the enormous amount of school work and many other hassles. Therefore, there is likelihood that this helping young people overcome problems also reduces their worries. As a result, they are not tortured by stress and have a happy and relaxing life. Indeed, knowing how to plan and organize provide young people with happiness.

On the other hand, some people might say that it is completely unnecessary for young people to do all the planning, since they have their parents and teacher to do that for them. As a consequence, to plan and organize would be a redundant skill which do not makes young people happier. However, that is not necessarily the case. In fact, parents and teacher cannot always keep up to plan for the young. For that reason, young people need to know how to plan and organize for themselves. Furthermore, it is common knowledge that a lot of time for young people is saved if they can organize their schedule wisely. Thus, they no longer have to worry too much about not having enough time, and also have more hours in a day for leisure activities. This allows them to pursue their hobbies, to relax and relieve stress after hard-working days at school. Accordingly, young people are filled with joy and happiness thanks to their ability. By and large, the claim that being capable of planning and organizing have no effect on young people’s happiness is intrinsically false.

In summary, by earning success, overcoming problems and having time for hobbies, young people are happier if they know to plan and organize. It is highly recommended that sociologists take my writing into detailed consideration to make an appropriate decision on planning and organization ability.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'make'?
Suggestion: make
...would be a redundant skill which do not makes young people happier. However, that is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in summary, as a result, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05664488017 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75019756649 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483660130719 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2581567189 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2692307692 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6538461538 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306083356782 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976109547687 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709900272488 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222994489404 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511350135576 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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