The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph reveals information about the percentage of instructors including English language and French language educators who were hired in Ontario during the period from 2001 to 2007. Overall, it’s also worth noticing that the recruitment of English language teachers mainly growth while an opposite pattern was showed for the counterpart.

It can be clearly seen that the proportion of English language teachers who were employed witnessed a gradual fall to nearly 50% in 2002, from 70% in 2001 before recovering to 68% in the following year. Afterward, there was hardly any change in the percentage of the recruitment of English language instructors until 2006, followed by a slight growth by 6%.

In contrast, a sharp drop of 32% in 2001 was seen in the percent of educators teaching French from 72% in 2001 before rising slightly to 43% in the next two years. Subsequently, this figure went down continuously to hit a trough at 18% in the remaining period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...6, followed by a slight growth by 6%. In contrast, a sharp drop of 32% in 2001...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 819.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08695652174 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78955986254 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621118012422 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6670792054 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147167060678 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674980702512 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594126562313 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974089441492 0.15604864568 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769543356679 0.0819641961636 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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