SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The argument presented by the author may be flawed for the numerous reasons. Primarily the argument is based on the assumption that surge in the number of homeowner can somehow benefit Supercorp. It may seem convincing that according to the facts presented in the argument, the conclusion in valid, but certain assumptions taken by the author fails to present a cogent case to it.
It is assumed in the argument that surge in the number of homeowners can somehow benefit Supercorp. However, it is nowhere mentioned that how is Supercorp is getting benefit from homeowners. Additionally, the argument states that Corporatevile is 'superior' place to live, but argument fails to mention that what factors are involved to constitute it superior than Middlesburg. Had it been mentioned that how increase in homeowners affects Supercorp, the argument would have presented a little persuasive case.
Secondly, the argument bases it's claim on a survey conducted that employees do not prefer Urban areas to work. However the Scope and range of survey is not mentioned i-e, whether all the working employees participated in the survey or only a small number of employees participated in that survey. Thus, the conclusion will fall apart if only a few number of employees participated in the survey.
The argument assumes that lowering the taxes is the only factor contributing for deciding that whether the place is cheaper than Middlesburg. It may be possible that taxes be cheaper than middlesburg but the other expenses like household expeneses, rent etc may be costlier than that in Middlesburg.
The argument presented by the author are based on a lot of unwarranted assumption which can cause the conclusion that " supercorp made the best decision to shift its headquarters from middlesburg to Corporateville" to fall apart. To make a clear case the author should have presented a more detailed scenario on what are the benefits conferred by Supercorp by shifting their headquarters.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1630 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.903 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.774 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.671 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
... are involved to constitute it superior than Middlesburg. Had it been mentioned that...
^^^^
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...yees do not prefer Urban areas to work. However the Scope and range of survey is not me...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...yees participated in the survey or only a small number of employees participated in that survey. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...he conclusion will fall apart if only a few number of employees participated in the survey...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 320.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.240625 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04333127253 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471875 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.555228283 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.785714286 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204890629987 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781681276973 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569196725085 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110713679635 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571135412034 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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