The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the price of black and white and colour tv in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The multiline graph illustrate the information about the average of monthly income and cost of black and white and colourful silver screen during 1953 and 1973. Units were measured in thousand Japanese yens.
In overall, a dramatically rise can be noticed in monthly salaries over the period since the price of black and white and colour magic box declined slightly at the end of the period.
With regards to a steady increase accounted at over 20,000 yens at the first year (1953) . Likewise, after one decade it countinously started growing at approximately 100,000 Japanese yen. In contrast, a amount of monthly income can be observed a rose inclined and reached at peak with 180,000 yens from 1973.
The graph further prove that price of black and white idiot box accounted a 100,000 Japanese yens between 1953, after this it showed a downward trend and seen over a 40,000 yens in 1963. Apart from this, the cost of black and white television accounted over a 20,000 yens at the end of the period. Moreover, amount of colourful silver screen was observing negligible during 1953 after that it grow high at peak with 180,000 yens in 1963. Lastly, it represented a declined and stable at 80,000 Japanese yens between 1973.C
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...g 1953 and 1973. Units were measured in thousand Japanese yens. In overall, a dramatic...
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Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead an adjective, or a noun ('rise') instead of another adjective.
...n thousand Japanese yens. In overall, a dramatically rise can be noticed in monthly salaries over...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... over 20,000 yens at the first year 1953 . Likewise, after one decade it countinou...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tely 100,000 Japanese yen. In contrast, a amount of monthly income can be observe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, lastly, likewise, moreover, apart from, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1021.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90865384615 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47841347779 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504807692308 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1820564587 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.1 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.23603664747 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247891026141 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112827189661 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676323970687 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171290384617 0.15604864568 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574652510329 0.0819641961636 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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