A nation should require all of its students to study same national curriculum until they enter the college.
it has been commonly believed that requirement for students to study same national curriculum benefits the education system in many regions around the world, and in fact some countries has been implementing such policy for a considerable period of time. however, I conjure the negative possible effects of the aforementioned stipulation outweigh the beneficiary ones for numerous reasons.
First and foremost, although it makes it more convenient for schools to recruit its faculty if all schools are offering the same sets of curriculum, it nevertheless cannot erase the difficulty in the process of establishing such schdules of courses. Elementary schools and middle schools provides fundamental to study and research to seemingly standardized children of approximately same age, lives in the vicinity of each other, and probably are born in the same hospitals. however, one cannot doubt that there are a large population of kids who are determined to conduct their study towards their own goals even from a very young age. A mandatory identical set of classes would instead of improving their abilities, impede their purposes. Besides, students nowadays are a mixture of different ethnicities and cultures who may speak distinct native languages from others. To disregard even the nauces of difference between these individuals by simply feeding them with same courses at school does not represent the ideal method toward the purported goal of better schooling, if not hinder the already founded basics. Indeed, it is hardly impossible to trim all trees alongside a driveway and expect them to grow to the same length all the time, not to mention applying similar approaches towards human beings where more factors will come into effect and distort and sometimes converse the goals.
Secondly, implementing such mandatory recommendation of schools providing same courses to students before entering colleges works as the basis for a lack of motivation to breach the set line towards further innovation in academia. Chinese notorious standardized college Entrance examination, for instance, has long been a center of contentious cacophonies full of impeachments and denouncements. Teachers complains about the stipulation because thanks to this, schools always tie their pays to the performance of the students of whom they are being required to be responsible for. Parents, on the other hands, resent the examination because they view it negatively as it hampers their childrens' ability to conduct critical thinking, whereas memorization of detailed information is encouraged under the outlines of the content on the exam. nevertheless, students do not consider this policy the best way to get into college due to the reason of over-stress of the examination and possible deterious impact on mental well-beings.
some may contend that using a standardized course set makes it possible for a country to make education available to everyone, even kids who reside in the remote rural areas. however, let's not forget that education is about giving the tools for an individual to further advance their skills of learning, and not simple menmorization and recites of detailed information that will do little good on them once they graduate from school and forget such knowledge. In this sense, I disagree with the recommendation stated in the argument, and prefer education to stay as a way of cultivating individuals, instead of another industrialized process where students are treated indiscriminately.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagre 66
- Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. 16
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, for instance, in fact, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2975.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 544.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46875 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02797865071 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564338235294 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 940.5 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9655499449 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.0 118.986275619 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174535834962 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474361701835 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491077564297 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998008968657 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462843488625 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 14.1392134831 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 100.480337079 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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