TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task

The issue both the reading and the listening focus on is the maintenance of human presence on Venus, but the listening proposes a solution to challenges given in the reading.

At the first point, the reading states that the atmospheric pressure on Venus's surface is too large, at least 90 times greater the Earth's surface pressure. Spacecraft landing on Venus would be crushed by the extreme pressure. According to the listening, a place 50 kilometers above the surface has normal pressure similar to that on Earth. Therefore, crushed spacecrafts can be avoided.

At the second point, the reading mentions that there are no reservoirs of water on Venus, and its atmosphere is mostly made up of carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid. Accordingly, water and oxygen need to be supplied form Earth. However, the listening argues that water and oxygen can be produced using chemicals obtained from compounds found on Venus. Humans therefore can create water and oxygen without needing supply from Earth.

At the third point, the reading believes that about 60 percent of the sunlight is reflected back by thick clouds, and some of the remaining sunlight are blocked by a layer of carbon dioxide below the clouds. Very little light can reach the surface, and humans cannot get electricity from solar cells. On the contrary, the listening confirms that a place above the carbon dioxide layer is only blocked by clouds. Humans can use solar cells to utilize sunlight from both below the clouds and reflected above the clouds. Hence, solar energy can be created.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... is reflected back by thick clouds, and some of the remaining sunlight are blocked by a lay...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, hence, however, second, so, therefore, third, at least, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 22.412803532 31% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 258.0 270.72406181 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08914728682 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49082506062 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531007751938 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.9402193648 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7857142857 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455918911246 0.272083759551 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150600601467 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748581030651 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230362836149 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860605381071 0.0443174109184 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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