The passage and the lecture both explains about the altruism. The passage states that this is a kind of behavior in which animal and human beings help others without gaining something. In contrast, the lecture says that it's not true that the animal and human are not gaining anything in return.
First point passage made about the human being that some of the people donate the organ such as a kidney to their relative. Infact there are a few people who give their organ to the person whom they don't know at all. In this act, they don't get any benefit or rewards in back. However, the lecturer says about the people that it is not that they are not getting anything they are getting appreciation and nice beautiful words from other people. It makes them feel self-worth. Only getting materialistic rewards is not the things, for some people getting this appreciation is more valuable.
Furthermore, the passage gives the example of an animal meerkat for having altruistic behavior and says that one of group member acts as a standing guard to see the predators while others are hunting for food. The standing guard gets no food and also make their life in danger to save the group. But the lecture casts doubt in it by saying that a study has been shown that the standing guard eats first and then they perform the act of standing. Beside this lecturer also adds the point that the standing guard is the one who sees first to see the predators so he runs first. Thus he is safer than another group member. when the standing guard makes noise to warn another group member that predators are here it becomes more dangerous for the group member because now predators understand it and he can go and eat the Meerkat group. So basically the standing guard does not save their lives but putting them in danger.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...passage made about the human being that some of the people donate the organ such as a kidne...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ive their organ to the person whom they dont know at all. In this act, they dont ge...
^^^^
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ey dont know at all. In this act, they dont get any benefit or rewards in back. How...
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Line 5, column 577, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... to see the predators so he runs first. Thus he is safer than another group member. ...
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Line 5, column 622, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...he is safer than another group member. when the standing guard makes noise to warn ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, while, in contrast, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 322.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63043478261 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20059271785 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490683229814 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 447.3 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9503594189 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1875 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0589340581794 0.272083759551 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0159974316834 0.0996497079465 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424791760203 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0281455932293 0.162205337803 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398038796659 0.0443174109184 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.2367328918 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.42419426049 81% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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