Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.

The ability to plan is important to everyone. Nowadays modern life is going to be more complex each day. Some people believe that it is essential for youngers to have the ability to plan, others neglect this ability. In my opinion, all young people must practice to plan and get better in organizing their plans. I believe this for two main reasons.
In the beginning, youngers should use all their time. If they plan for all of their choices they can use their time efficiently. I write my story to illustrate this. When I was a child I liked to be rich, But, I liked to get master degree too, getting master degree needs lots of time. I learned from my father to use my time correctly. I planed for my education and work at the same time. I was studying at days and I was working at night, hence, I could proceed both. I am going to get master degree just right now and I have a lot of money too. That's why I believe everyone has to have the ability to plan.
Second, youngers need planing to find some time to be with their family. Young people have a lot of work to do and if they don't have a plan for their deeds they can not find some time to relax or having fun with their friends and families. For instance, my little brother is a student. He has a lot of assignments every day because of his major. Last year my father suggests to go on a trip together, the whole of the family, my little brother couldn't come with us because he had to study. After that, wh tried to teach him to plan for his life. Now, he plans for studying, working, having fun and so on, so, We are not concern about him when trying to go on a trip. This achievement wan not feasible without planing.
In conclusion, youngers must have the ability to plan. they need time for having fun with their families and they have to use all of their time to success. youngers mustn't neglect their plans.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practice planning'.
Suggestion: practice planning
...y. In my opinion, all young people must practice to plan and get better in organizing their plan...
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Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...my education and work at the same time. I was studying at days and I was working ...
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Line 2, column 470, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... at night, hence, I could proceed both. I am going to get master degree just righ...
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Line 2, column 548, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ight now and I have a lot of money too. Thats why I believe everyone has to have the ...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...le have a lot of work to do and if they dont have a plan for their deeds they can no...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests going', 'suggests gonna'.
Suggestion: suggests going; suggests gonna
...cause of his major. Last year my father suggests to go on a trip together, the whole of the fa...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... whole of the family, my little brother couldnt come with us because he had to study. A...
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Line 4, column 55, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...youngers must have the ability to plan. they need time for having fun with their fam...
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Youngers
...ve to use all of their time to success. youngers mustnt neglect their plans.
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Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: mustn't
... all of their time to success. youngers mustnt neglect their plans.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, second, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24301675978 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23398908209 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486033519553 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2878170784 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.76 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.32 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0877618443973 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0281621917263 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322265233005 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0695324301181 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270879270262 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 11.7677419355 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.72 10.9000537634 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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