Some people believe that putting prisoners in confinement cannot be regarded as the most effective measure. In contrast, providing education and job training programs are more beneficial. Personally, I totally advocate this view for several reasons.
There are various disadvantages when all ofenders are brought into captivity. First and foremost, government have to cover the cost of running and managing prisoners . In other words, a large amount of money is paid for investment in security and facilities. Although in many countries, keeping criminals in jail aims to protect well-being of the society, this expense can be diverted for more essential matters such as transport system innovations or food supply to remote areas. In addtion, a gloomy picture of prisoner life and what he suffered in the long run would lead his resentful. As a consequence, this would prevent ex-prisoners to become productive members of the society after being released from prison.
In contrast, I believe that offering education and occupational skill training programs bring more advatages. Firstly, this practice offer a tremendous assistance to offenders in term of changing positive attitude. In other words, education is the optimal way to heighten their awareness of disastrous consequences if following evil-doers’ footsteps . Additionally, job training programs might provide them with stable employment and it is extremely important because I believe it used to be one of the main motives for crime. Clearly, if they have a chance to socialize again, they would no longer have motivation to reoffend.
In conclusion, although imprisonment is the most popular method to deal with crime problems, I strongly believe that there are better measures to reduce crime rate such as education and vocational courses
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- Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage? 84
- Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? 22
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, well, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56115107914 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02566403574 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651079136691 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.294395042 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.066666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5333333333 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226791525801 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603184070537 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633327007219 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124805758872 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308885717502 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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