Both the reading and the lecture are about asthma and its consequences and causes. The reading provides us with a definition of this term and a couple of consequences of asthma such as susceptibility to certain triggers and bronchial narrowing. The lecturer, however, challenges the author's point of view by trying to show that the mentioned consequences are, in fact, causes of the desease. He bolsters the argument by citing the results of a particular research.
First of all, the reading passage provides information about the triggers that asthmatics are susceptible to, such as pollen, fur, etc. However, the lecturer notes that not only those triggers are accountable for the desease emmergance, but also genetic factors must be taken into consideration. The thing is, it has been discovered that some fraction of people with asthma were already born with it.
Secondly, the author claims that there are two causes of broncial narrowing that is caused ny asthma: squeezing by musceles and blocking by mucus. He is also of the opinion that those conditions subside after the attack and the airways return to normal. Notwithstanding, it is clearly stated in the lectute that those conditions are not the consequences of the desease, but rather causes. With time, they cause remodeling of tubes which is the basis for developing asthma.
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- Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals. 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er, challenges the authors point of view by trying to show that the mentioned con...
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Line 1, column 444, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'particular research'.
Suggestion: particular research
...s the argument by citing the results of a particular research. First of all, the reading passage ...
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he lectute that those conditions are not the consequences of the desease, but rat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, secondly, so, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1129.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 218.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17889908257 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87714159815 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596330275229 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 347.4 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0672424544 49.2860985944 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.636363636 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235781806535 0.272083759551 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928426901958 0.0996497079465 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10390289943 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161884463194 0.162205337803 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437299080345 0.0443174109184 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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