Friends play an important role in our lives since we spend lots of our time playing with them or talking to them. If it is asked, whether or not, students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends, due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general agreement on this issue. I am, however to a great extent of conviction that friends affect students more than their teachers for two main reasons which I will aptly substantiate in the following paragraphs.
The major reason is that as students choose their friends themselves they are very close to their friends. On the other hand, choosing teachers is not like this. In some cases, teenagers are not allowed to select their schools even. As I mentioned, when they are with their friends they feel more comfortable and this will lead them to be affected more by their friends. Whatever their friends tell them, they will accept. For example, when I was ten years old, one night I decided to go shopping with one of my close friends. That night, he suggested I run a new company. I wondered and told him: " We are ten years old, are you serious?". because he was able to persuade me easily, he could convince me to start doing that. We have now one of the best chocolate companies in the country just because of his influence on me. As you can see, we wouldn't have had this giant company, if he couldn't influence me in the way he did.
Another reason is that people spend time with their friends more. This will lead them to talk more with their friends and maybe become affected. It is rational that when you spend most of your time with a person he or she will influence you to do some tasks or to think in a specific way. My own experience is compelling evidence of this situation. When I was a child, I had a friend named Hassan, he was my classmate and neighbor. Most of the time, we were together. We had to go to school with each other and there were many other things that we supposed to do with each other. We were not that close but we were good friends. As we spent most of our time with each other, it was possible to be affected by each other. We couldn't have influenced each other if we didn't spend that much time.
To put the issue into perspective, in spite of the fact that some may think students are more influenced by their teacher than their friends, I believe friends can affect students more. Not only are teenagers closer to their friends, but also they spend time with their friends more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...hem or talking to them. If it is asked, whether or not, students are more influenced by their ...
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Suggestion: Because
... ten years old, are you serious?'. because he was able to persuade me easily, he c...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...his influence on me. As you can see, we wouldnt have had this giant company, if he coul...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ldnt have had this giant company, if he couldnt influence me in the way he did. Anot...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a specific way" with adverb for "specific"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...luence you to do some tasks or to think in a specific way. My own experience is compelling eviden...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...ssible to be affected by each other. We couldnt have influenced each other if we didnt ...
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Suggestion: didn't
...ouldnt have influenced each other if we didnt spend that much time. To put the iss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, for example, in some cases, in spite of, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 93.0 43.0788530466 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44924406048 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37018379588 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451403887689 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7129714372 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2307692308 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8076923077 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320824916015 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977171895787 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953811280408 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246500382968 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716439799242 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.49 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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