The map depicts the possible spots for building a new supermarket in Garlsdon city.(re-write)

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The map depicts the possible spots for building a new supermarket in Garlsdon city.(re-write)

The map depicts the possible spots for building a new supermarket in Garlsdon city.

Overall, there are 2 sites on plan, noted as S1 and S2. While S1 will be built in the countryside, the location of S2 is held in the free traffic zone in the town centre.

As per the map, the suggested location, S2, for building a new supermarket is placed in the resident area. Also in the south-west and south-east of the map there are 2 rush belt cities. The highway from Bransdon (16 km with 15,000 population) to Cransdon (25 km with 29,000 population) and vice versa is linked to the centre of the town were the location of S2 is sited in. This might be pointed as the best spot compared with the area of S1. The location of S2 would probably reflect how important it is to the local inhabitant living around there.

Turning to the S1, does it has no bargaining for better spot? S1 location is sited just off the main road to the town of Hindon, lying 12 km in the north-west. Also, located between railway and main road and pass through the outskirt’s road makes such spot easily to attract the traveler, while this is not allowed in the area of S2. Besides, the location of the countryside enables for S2 having a large parking area or any additional features to serve the customer.

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The highway from Bransdon..
The main road from Bransdon //no highway in the map

The highway from Bransdon (16 km with 15,000 population) to Cransdon (25 km with 29,000 population) and vice versa is linked to the centre of the town were the location of S2 is sited in
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does it has no bargaining for better spot?
does it have no bargaining for better spot?

located between railway and main road and pass through the outskirt’s road makes
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