Today’s world has witnessed the dramatic growth of numerous types of entertainment on handheld appliances. While some argue that this phenomenon can bring about several negative impacts on individuals and the whole society, I opine that it can be advantageous to some extent.
On the one hand, there are 2 main reasons why it is believed that entertainment available on handheld devices can have deleterious effects. First of all, recreational facilities such as video games can make people, especially the children, get several seriously physical and neurological disorders. For instance, if a person glues on the phone screen for a long time without going out for any social activities, he may suffer from obesity, short-sightedness or even depression. The second reason is the negative impacts of numerous illegal games distributed uncontrollably on the Internet. To be more specific, various counter-educational kinds of entertainment such as violent or sexual games may lead people to improper and unlawful behaviors. This can be the primary cause of the increase of adverse criminal cases such as robbery or sexual assault, which can damnify social safety and national security.
On the other hand, I argue that recreational facilities can be benefical to individuals and society. Firstly, technological games can direct users to positive values. To elaborate, in the past, people used to play traditional games which require little brainstorming efforts. However, nowadays, modern handheld devices have transformed into a valuable tool which has allowed games to be more complicated, requiring an advanced combination of knowledge, skills and creativity to generate an effective playing strategies. Secondly, entertainment industry based on technology games will have more opportunities to develop, thus contributing various undeniable value to the society such as taxes.
In conclusion, although it is argued that types of entertainment on handheld devices can be disadvantageous, I strongly opine that they can be have positive impacts of each individual and the development of the whole society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65203761755 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32277163115 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583072100313 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9044295371 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.785714286 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209118441564 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712041443581 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413919638082 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126534146506 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359428662183 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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