There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success.Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter:• Describe what the problem with the changing rooms

Dear sir or Madam,
as a regular member of the sport complex called 'Olympic', I am writing this letter to lodge a complaint about an inconvenience related to changing rooms, which have always discouraged athletics to join.

Regarding the issue, it is inefficient air-conditioning system which makes the atmosphere of this area to appalling. Due to the fact that most visitors come here to change their sport clothes after physical exercises, this place is needed to enjoy great amount of fresh air in order to keep the unpleasant smell of sweaty bodies away. However, apparently this appeal has not been considered by the service supervisors.

I have notified your subordinates about this matter through several oral complaints but interestingly they have done nothing. For instance, last time I met a shift supervisor and not only informed but also convinced him that they are expected to renew this equipment , but I was told that this could be too costly and impossible.

Therefore, |I feel,on behalf of other members, I am entitled to request you for allocating adequate budget for resolving this problem either by changing this equipment with more efficient one or adding another air-conditioner.

Yours faithfully,
Davood Alizadeh,

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 267, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hey are expected to renew this equipment , but I was told that this could be too c...
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Line 8, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , on
...ly and impossible. Therefore, |I feel,on behalf of other members, I am entitled ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1053.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31818181818 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96439823191 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.742424242424 0.622605031667 119% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4885939409 44.8134815571 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.625 76.5299724578 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 16.8248392259 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 4.34317383033 256% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151383092761 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543837669663 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470331653771 0.0603063233224 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086969178492 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394193000688 0.0580467560999 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 8.37731958763 191% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 70.7449484536 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 7.45979381443 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 8.71597938144 159% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 7.59969072165 129% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 8.15463917526 196% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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