There is no gainsaying that a big portion of media news is about celebrities' ideas and lives. There are some controversial issues whether celebrities’ opinions effects young people more than old people or not. From my viewpoint, young people take care more than older people to celebrities' believes based on the following reasons.
First of all, young people spend more time for knowing about the celebrities. In better words, young people have more time rather older people. The great majority of older people are occupied and should work to earn money. They should spend time with their families' members. While, the young people spend more time with their friends and they talk about celebrities in their meeting. For example, teenagers have plenty time in comparison their parents and they enjoy talking about celebrities. Thus, they are more likely to accept the celebrities' ideas.
Second, young people are not as experienced as older people. They want to follow some people. Celebrities are some famous people and they are a good source for following, while older people think independently and they do not attach much importance to celebrities’ ideas. They have experienced ups and downs of life and they formed their beliefs and they cannot change their ideas as easily as young people. For example, when celebrities ask people to do something like challenges that are usual in social networks, young people do this challenges. From some older people these challenges are absurd. Therefore, young people admit celebrities words and beliefs more easily than older people.
Third, young people and celebrities are at the same age and they have more common rather than older people. In better words, each generation has his specific features. Older people prefer to listen to older people rather young ones. For example, a 40 year person does not like to care about a 20 years singer words, beliefs, thoughts and etc.
Consequently, the celebrities’ beliefs have more far-reaching impact on younger people rather than older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while, for example, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66655272096 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462006079027 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.424579411 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0454545455 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9545454545 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254445666421 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101010222274 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052996392359 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168318354901 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237160774674 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.81 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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