An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia — the scent of lavender flowers — has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
According to the author, A traditional remedy seems to be doing a better job in curing Insomnia than the modern medication. S/He explains a recent study to prove the credibility of the statement and mentions about the results of the study. However, there are some unanswered questions before jumping into the claim made by the Author. I would like to elaborate them in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, what is the background information of the 30 volunteers that are being studied in this case. What are the levels of Insomnia faced by them? What is there history with this disease? What are there current medication levels? Perhaps, we may be just looking at a bunch of volunteers who are in their initial stages of Insomnia. If that is the case we can conclude that the traditional remedy can only be used during the initial stages of development of the disease.
Additionally, Author mentions that all the volunteers are wakened tired during each week and the levels of tiredness increased when they stopped taking their medication. Also he skips mentioning about this when he discusses the results of third week. Should we just assume about this? Why are the volunteers increasingly tired even when they sleep soundly? Is this some kind of a side effect of lavender on volunteers? We are not sure about this too. We can also predict that there might be harmful effects on the longer run as we have an indication in the early stages itself.
Lastly, I would also like to comment on the electronic equipment used to monitor the sleep of the patients. What is the procedure exactly that is carried out? How does this procedure exactly work? How accurate are the tools being used? If we do not know the credibility of the sleep monitor, then one cannot claim the results to be true. We also need to inspect on the factors that are considered to claim that a volunteer is sleeping soundly.
As it stands now, we can say that the Author's conclusion is flawed, It requires more research and should be able to answer the posed questions in order to effectively claim that his conclusion is true.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 365 350
No. of Characters: 1695 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.371 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.644 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.208 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.714 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...them in the subsequent paragraphs. Firstly, what is the background informat...
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Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat is there history with this disease? What are there current medication levels? Pe...
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Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re in their initial stages of Insomnia. If that is the case we can conclude that t...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ges of development of the disease. Additionally, Author mentions that all t...
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Line 9, column 177, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...n they stopped taking their medication. Also he skips mentioning about this when he ...
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Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...n when they sleep soundly? Is this some kind of a side effect of lavender on volunteers? ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ation in the early stages itself. Lastly, I would also like to comment on ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... a volunteer is sleeping soundly. As it stands now, we can say that the Au...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, then, third, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82967032967 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60533436969 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516483516484 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3486815537 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.25 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1666666667 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.67664670659 342% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104616382586 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300870593673 0.0743258471296 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330978298054 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0561156998209 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366299240069 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.3799401198 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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