The great majority of people especialy young people are always worried sbout their future career. There are controverial arguments about the contributing factors which are influential for being prosper in careers. Some people believe that people who have suitable ability to relate with people are more successful than people who just study hard. In contrast, from my perspective, hard studying is more important than ability to relate with poeple, since hard working students not only have a compeling resume but also have more chance for expert jobs. In addtion, hard working students are able to adopt themselves with new conditions. The ensuing praragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that hard working students are able to get great grade in universities. These days, most of the companies ask people to send their resume for job opportunities and somebody is responsible should elect some resume amont the all resume are sent. This person select the toppest resume based on some indicators specifically the grades and GPA. In better words, people who want to acquire jobs, will be invited to interview based on their resume. Therefore, the hard working students are more likely to be invited for interview.
Second point that comes to my mind is that some careers are an expert jobs without any relation to other people. In better words, a software engineer should have enough knowledge for software developing and employer prefer a hard working student who has more knowledge, a an employee. In contrast, the ability to relate people well is necessary for some jobs like marketing. Hence, poeple should make decision about their future career and they foster their ability based on their favorit jobs.
Last but not least, the hard working students are more capable to adopt the situations. Students who attemp abundantly and want to be successful in the university, learn to try for being successful in the working place. On the other words, hard working students have suffcient attempt for changing thier situation in the working place. For example, a student who studies hard during day and night, certainly are more likely for doing a project or writing a report on the time. Moreover, she can do her duties better than other; so, employer attach more importance to this person and promotes this person.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, the people who study hard, are more likely to be successful in the future jobs like when they were successful in university.
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TPO 31 - Integrated Writing Task 73
- T-P-O 34 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...working student who has more knowledge, a an employee. In contrast, the ability t...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...working student who has more knowledge, a an employee. In contrast, the ability to r...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17590361446 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59736235224 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489156626506 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4098613639 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264826060546 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861277721081 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664472096188 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165983101097 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559881985265 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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