The satisfaction people require depends on several factors depending on their environment, age and their motives. People try to go after different goals during different phases of their lives. Considering the motive of enjoying the life, i believe that younger people tries to achieve it in grand scale than the older people with the responsibilities that they hold and their physical strength.
To begin with, teenagers have limited responsibilities in their day today life giving ample of opportunities to discover new possibilities. They are always trying to make themselves entertained by watching movies, going on trips and even meeting with friends. When i was a child of age twelve, I saw how my brother spent his day playing video games, going out with his friends and even listening to music. But my parents on the same time were very busy with the household chores, their workplace activities. They had to do everything to take care of us and to buy us new clothes, books for education and all the things that we requested. I felt like my brother enjoyed his life more than my parents as he had only to make sure that he behaved well and got good grades to make my parents proud of him. Furthermore, as the young people know that they will get busy when they get older with the increased sense of responsibility, they also try to enjoy the life to the fullest with the limited time that they have.
Secondly, when people get older, their physical strength to go for challenging and adventurous tasks reduces drastically as they are fed up of life with the intention of relaxing more than enjoying. For instance, when i was a kid, my grandfather was my caretaker. He shared his life stories of him with me. He had played football every evening those days. But when i requested him to play with me, he has no such power to hit the ball and even my parents scolded me for asking him to play making him tired. Even though, my grandpa enjoyed playing football back then, he has drained the physical strength with his age disrupting his sources of happiness. Additionally, being older creates the imbalance of physical and mental strength of a person which hinders the development of a person to fully enjoy their life.
In conclusion, it is highly depicted that young people are showing their happiness more than the elders highlighting the fact that they enjoy their life up to their fullest capacity. Young people have their physical and the mental strength to achieve their ultimate objective of enjoying life with the assistance provided by the elders to lead a better life providing resources.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83258928571 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68847777509 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497767857143 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2623587702 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.947368421 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227883058422 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074628610934 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765515164807 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16704193364 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517343377828 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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