The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
“Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora’s citizens meet the current standards
for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of
Corpora’s citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken
when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in
fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer
ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made
citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year’s unusually low expenditures on
fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely
the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does.”
The author of the writings in the health magazine argues against the medical experts stance. Though medical experts attribute declining fitness rate of Corpora's citizen to spending too much time in front of the computer. While the author provides some reasons behind his position, his argument is depended on some assumption, that if prove unwarranted, will seriously weaken the argument.
First of all, the author assumes that rate computer ownership is related to the time spent in front of the computer. Assuming that, the author argues that fitness level being high in areas where computer ownership is also high means using computer have not made people physically unfit. But this may not be true. For example, it is possible the region which has high ownership of computer is a rich portion of the city. Although they use computer time to time, people who use computer in office spends lot more time in front of it. As it does not mean they have to own a computer to spend time in front of it, the author's logic that fitness level being high in areas where computer ownership is also high means using computer have not made people physically unfit does not hold water if this assumption is wrong.
Secondly, the author assumes that people's fitness level is related money spent on fitness related products and services. Using this assumption, the author argues that spending less on fitness related products is the cause of declining physical fitness. This also may not be true. For example, this is possible that people who buys fitness related products and services do not necessarily do the exsercise much. They may buy it as a luxury. It is also possible people who don't spend money on fitness related products tend to exercise more, like walking/jogging in the park and doing yoga at home. So, author's case that declining expenditure on fitness related products and services is the cause of declining fitness level of citizen will be wrong if this assumption prove unwarranted.
Thirdly, the author assumes that people will buy more fitness related products when economy will improve. Arguing that, author states that fitness level will increase when economy will improve. But this may also not necessarily be the case. May be, people buy less fitness products when economy is good and spend more on luxury items. It is also possible expenditure on fitness related products are declining steadily over the decades and that does not depend on the well being of the economy. So, authors argument will be seriously weakened if this assumption prove to be unwarranted.
Closely considering author's argument, it can be said that the author makes some assumptions which may or may not be true. For properly evaluating the merit of the argument, it is necessary to examine the validity of those assumptions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 472 350
No. of Characters: 2298 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.661 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.869 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.401 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.433 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'experts'' or 'expert's'?
Suggestion: experts'; expert's
...lth magazine argues against the medical experts stance. Though medical experts attribut...
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Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ues against the medical experts stance. Though medical experts attribute declining fit...
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Line 7, column 615, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...puter to spend time in front of it, the authors logic that fitness level being high in ...
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Line 15, column 473, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... luxury. It is also possible people who dont spend money on fitness related products...
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Line 21, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e will buy more fitness related products when economy will improve. Arguing that,...
^^
Line 27, column 80, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t can be said that the author makes some assumptions which may or may not be true...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05531914894 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48768901796 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.378723404255 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.1750843276 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0288958963525 0.218282227539 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0127408864632 0.0743258471296 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280890104214 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0240809063181 0.128457276422 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344309981169 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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