The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
It goes without saying that in today's sophisticated world where we live in, movies and TV showes earned a wast popularity therefore, celebrities are samely becoming more pupular. The majority of people they have the strongest effect are the young generation. For a long time, the importance and the high influence of wellknown acters and athletes to society has been a controversial issue in all countries aroung the globe. Many communities have been debating whether or not the celebrities have such an obvious impact. Plenty of people holds the conviction that the regard of celebrities are more crucial to youngsters rather than older people, whereas others might hold precisely the opposite view. I firmly endorse the first conviction instead of the later one. The reasons substantiating my viewpoint are investigated in the following essay.
The first point to be mentioned is that older people are more rational and mature compared to young generation. Hence, their decisions are more thoughfulness and they are less prone to be affected by alluring actions made by famous people. On the other hand, young people are still in the phase that they are knowing themselves and looking for a model to follow. Therefore, celebrities are an easy choices to them because they are all around the media every day. My own experience demonstrate this concept. When I was in high school, I was to obsessed with a singer which was very famous and had been won many awards. I tried to dress like her and do my makeup like she did. Back then, all these actions seems so normal and ok to me but, now when I look back I feel sorry for myself that I chose such a cheap model.
Alongside the elaborated reason above, another idea that is noteworthy to consider is that because young people follows the actors and athletes It is obvious that celebrities are more influential on them.Old people are busy doing their work or providing for their families so they do not have enough time to follow celebrities opinions, however, youngsters are more free to follow celebrities. For instance, my nephew is following all her favorite cartoon character does but, I can not find enough time to even watch that show.
As shown above, taking all the reasons and points into account, it is my firm belief that celebrities opinion is mor critical for young community. This is because they are more free compared to older ones and because they are in a phese to have a model tp follow and celebrities are the simplest ones.
- Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 90
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in 90
- Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. 88
- In 1957 a European silver coin dating to the eleventh century was discovered at a Native American archaeological site in the state of Maine in the United States. Many people believed the coin had been originally brought to North America by European explor 85
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, look, so, still, then, therefore, well, whereas, as to, for instance, i feel, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87822014052 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64022415403 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536299765808 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1570617143 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.631578947 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220076125405 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594123961345 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569699079333 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131336343439 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267178065517 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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