Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Around the globe, people enjoy sports, which leads to the success of this profession. As a consequence, professional sport athelets receive huge salaries-well above, for example, those of doctors, lawyers, teachers and social workers. This matter has attracted for-and-against views in scociety.
It is undeniable that several athelets have to devote their's childhood to practice sports everday. Athelets train rigoliously from an early age to become peak performers in their field. For example, to become a professional ballet dancer, they may take many years. Besides, the approriate time ti start learning ballet is around 8 to 10 years old whearest it only last for a short time. Moreover, they can face tremendous pressure in each and every game, match or competiton. In several cases, they can loose all their career if they suffer serious injuries that prevent them following sports.
To some extent, when it comes to famous and success, their personal lives are compromised and they lose all privacy which are related to not only themselves but their team also. For instance, if one athelets cause negative effects to his team, he may be fired. Once be fired, his career is possibly ended.
On the other hand, there are various professions contributing their effort to society. Doctors have to undergo a long time to cure the patients, while lawyers put in at least ten years of researching and stdying to understand rules and regislation: their works save justice. Teachers educate and inspire young generation to be respionsible and useful citizens, their effort produce the citizens of tomorrow. Social workers rescue individuals facing physical, mental and psychological challenges: their intervention creates safer society. All of these majors usually struggle to become professional.
In conclusion, I believe that every majors is deserved to a salary consistent with their contribtion; however; it may be because of characteristics of sport industry so athelets can have special treatment.
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