On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
It is true that limiting number of vehicles plying the road can reduce the number of road accidents. The author, in this argument, however, has surmised that the result can be duplicated in Balmer Island by implementing the exactly same strategy as was implemented in Seaville Island. Although the given premises are valid, it seems to be incomplete and need further deliberate survey to come to a more tenable, valid, and cogent conclusion. The argument is rife with holes and fallacious assumptions.
Without any evidence, the author has opined that two Islands are similar with respect to the traffic rules and regulations. Perhaps, in addition to cutting down the number of rental mopeds per day, the traffic rules and regulations in Seaville Island is made very strict so as to minimize the accidents, which could have resulted 50% reduction a year in accidents involving mopeds. Perhaps the licensing procedure in Seaville Island is very tough that only the expert riders get the moped’s license. Whereas, in Balmer Island may not having strict licensing procedure so that everyone gets license without much import, which could lead to a number of accidents.
Had the author surveyed about other specifics resulting decreased accidents in Seaville Island, he would have come with other important avenues. For example, the author must look at the number of vehicles plying the roads of both Islands. Furthermore, the author should have studied about the condition of the road. Perhaps the roads are wide and well managed, and number of mopeds is low in Seaville Island in comparision to Balmer Island.
The author assumes that, with the same rule, the results can be duplicated. Along with this assumption is the presumption that two islands are similar in respect of roads, traffic rules, number of vehicles. The author should look all these areas separately to better represent the similarity between two different Islands. Undoubtedly, it is to be noted that increasing the number of vehicles lead to more risk for road accidents. But author should not base upon the generalized implication to draw this specific conclusion. He should have better come with a more detailed study to yield more plausible assumption to back this conclusion.
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- On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the 66
Comments
this is my first argument
this is my first argument writing; finished in exactly 30 minute time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ch could lead to a number of accidents. Had the author surveyed about other spec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, well, whereas, as to, for example, in addition, it is true, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19452054795 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67789685096 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504109589041 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6604473282 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203619125056 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667507919869 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627095472627 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131789230449 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040446654887 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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