The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The young people are the main asset of a acountry.So it is important for a naition to prepare them properly so that they can lead the nation with prosperity.But here is a tricky thing, a nation can develop the idea of leadership by means of either cooperation or competition.From my point of view, I prefer the first one.
Competition is a common human instinct.Sometimes competition leads to envy.The tendency to fall back someone can be treated as competition.In sports,competition has a possitive impact.Sports are always competitive,therefore the coach and the player always target about how to compete with his opponent.National leadership is a quite much different from sports.A national leader is not a person who wants to become a winner.His goal should be the prosperity his people.So the competitive psycology in leadership is not desired.
Cooperation is the key to success for every person of a group of people.Cooperation develop the tendency to think about the good and bad of co-workers.A leader of a goverment or industry or any other field ,he needs to think about all his sub-ordinates rather than his own interest.So it is must requsite quality a leader should have.
Young people who will be the future leader needs to get nursing and learning to develop their psycology to think about a proper leader.So it is important to choose the right way of their learning.If they build up a competetive ideology they will not become a good leader .Because then their mind always wants to win his own game.But when a young guy get the learing of leadership in the sense of cooperation,the succsess of whole group will become his only interest.So i think , a society should prepare their young people for leadership by developing their sense of cooperation.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07876712329 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43534982798 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 73.0 23.0359550562 317% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.63529125 60.3974514979 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 370.75 118.986275619 312% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 73.0 23.4991977007 311% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.21951772744 211% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 7.80617977528 410% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196785505719 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112156292898 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061839094748 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112156292898 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061839094748 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.0 14.1392134831 276% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.62 48.8420337079 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.92365168539 216% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.8 12.1743820225 261% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.37 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.56 8.38706741573 126% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 11.8971910112 261% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 31.2 11.2143820225 278% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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