The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The young people are the main asset of a acountry.So it is important for a naition to prepare them properly so that they can lead the nation with prosperity.But here is a tricky thing, a nation can develop the idea of leadership by means of either cooperation or competition.From my point of view, I prefer the first one.
Competition is a common human instinct.Sometimes competition leads to envy.The tendency to fall back someone can be treated as competition.In sports,competition has a possitive impact.Sports are always competitive,therefore the coach and the player always target about how to compete with his opponent.National leadership is a quite much different from sports.A national leader is not a person who wants to become a winner.His goal should be the prosperity his people.So the competitive psycology in leadership is not desired.
Cooperation is the key to success for every person of a group of people.Cooperation develop the tendency to think about the good and bad of co-workers.A leader of a goverment or industry or any other field ,he needs to think about all his sub-ordinates rather than his own interest.So it is must requsite quality a leader should have.
Young people who will be the future leader needs to get nursing and learning to develop their psycology to think about a proper leader.So it is important to choose the right way of their learning.If they build up a competetive ideology they will not become a good leader .Because then their mind always wants to win his own game.But when a young guy get the learing of leadership in the sense of cooperation,the succsess of whole group will become his only interest.So i think , a society should prepare their young people for leadership by developing their sense of cooperation.
- The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than 23
- super cinema 33
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response m which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position 50
- The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. -Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the com 33
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The young people are the main asset of a acountry.So it is important for a naiti...
^
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...people are the main asset of a acountry.So it is important for a naition to prepar...
^^
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...hey can lead the nation with prosperity.But here is a tricky thing, a nation can de...
^^^
Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: From
...ns of either cooperation or competition.From my point of view, I prefer the first on...
^^^^
Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sometimes
... Competition is a common human instinct.Sometimes competition leads to envy.The tendency ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...nct.Sometimes competition leads to envy.The tendency to fall back someone can be tr...
^^^
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...k someone can be treated as competition.In sports,competition has a possitive impa...
^^
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , competition
... can be treated as competition.In sports,competition has a possitive impact.Sports are alway...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sports
...orts,competition has a possitive impact.Sports are always competitive,therefore the co...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , therefore
...ive impact.Sports are always competitive,therefore the coach and the player always target ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: National
... about how to compete with his opponent.National leadership is a quite much different fr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...p is a quite much different from sports.A national leader is not a person who wan...
^
Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: His
...t a person who wants to become a winner.His goal should be the prosperity his peopl...
^^^
Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...oal should be the prosperity his people.So the competitive psycology in leadershi...
^^
Line 3, column 500, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s people.So the competitive psycology in leadership is not desired. Cooperation...
^^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Cooperation
...s for every person of a group of people.Cooperation develop the tendency to think about the...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'develops'.
Suggestion: develops
...person of a group of people.Cooperation develop the tendency to think about the good an...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...nk about the good and bad of co-workers.A leader of a goverment or industry or an...
^
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...goverment or industry or any other field ,he needs to think about all his sub-ordi...
^^
Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...-ordinates rather than his own interest.So it is must requsite quality a leader sh...
^^
Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...leader needs to get nursing and learning to develop their psycology to think abou...
^^
Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...sycology to think about a proper leader.So it is important to choose the right way...
^^
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
... choose the right way of their learning.If they build up a competetive ideology th...
^^
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... choose the right way of their learning.If they build up a competetive ideology th...
^^
Line 7, column 272, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ology they will not become a good leader .Because then their mind always wants to ...
^^
Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...ogy they will not become a good leader .Because then their mind always wants to win his...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ogy they will not become a good leader .Because then their mind always wants to win his...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...r mind always wants to win his own game.But when a young guy get the learing of lea...
^^^
Line 7, column 409, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...f leadership in the sense of cooperation,the succsess of whole group will become his...
^^^^
Line 7, column 468, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ole group will become his only interest.So i think , a society should prepare thei...
^^
Line 7, column 471, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... group will become his only interest.So i think , a society should prepare their ...
^
Line 7, column 478, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...will become his only interest.So i think , a society should prepare their young pe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07876712329 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43534982798 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 73.0 23.0359550562 317% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.63529125 60.3974514979 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 370.75 118.986275619 312% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 73.0 23.4991977007 311% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.21951772744 211% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 7.80617977528 410% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196785505719 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112156292898 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061839094748 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112156292898 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061839094748 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.0 14.1392134831 276% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.62 48.8420337079 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.92365168539 216% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.8 12.1743820225 261% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.37 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.56 8.38706741573 126% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 11.8971910112 261% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 31.2 11.2143820225 278% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.