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whether it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on venus is the focus of both the writer and the professor. In the writing, three challenges, including great atmospheric pressure, no reservoirs of water and very little sunlight, have been elaborated. The professor, however, claims that these problems can be solved by constructing a floating station and a permanent human presence on venus would be possible.
As opposed to the writer’s idea that all spacecrafts landing on venus would be crushed by the extreme pressure, the professor states that building a floating station can solve the issue. he advances the theory by saying that the pressure at the 50 kilometers up in the atmosphere is equal to the normal pressure on Earth, so the spacecrafts landing on the station would have no risk of being crushed.
The professor continues to discredit the writing’s assertion that there are no reservoirs of water on venus’s surface, by examining the fact that venus’s surface contains compounds such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric compounds. In detail, he points out that theses compounds can be used to produce oxygen and water during chemical process, so it is not necessary to import oxygen and water.
it is the professor’s third argument that there is enough sunlight to generate electricity, which contradicts the view of the writer that the thickness of the clouds limits the amount of sunlight reaching the venus’s surface. To explore deeper, the clouds on a higher level are not thick so that there is sufficient sunlight to generate power; the sunlight reflected by the clouds can be still used by the cells of the power station.
An apparent divide exists between the writer and the professor on whether it is possible to maintain a permanent human presence on venus.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ary to import oxygen and water. it is the professor's third argument ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, still, third, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24161073826 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93077343178 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496644295302 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.621206443 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.2 110.228320801 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8 21.698381199 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 7.06452816374 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448947149602 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180802656788 0.0996497079465 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394264216956 0.0662205650399 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239153042313 0.162205337803 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613632890776 0.0443174109184 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.3589403974 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.8541721854 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.