Being a father and mother is a very difficult role for all to be accepted by anyone at any age except in certain circumstances that some do not want or cannot have children. Every parent should have a set of qualities to use in raising their child,the most importantly is working together to keep one person don't get tired. In addition, having a good financial situation so that all problems can be solved easily. In my opinion, everyone thinks they are the best parent in the world, but these two things seem to me to be the most important part.
First, for children, everything in this world is new and they just want to discover it. This also has risks. A good parent should be patient and spend most of their time educating their child. Educating children under the age of 5 requires a great deal of time and energy of parents. These children are very curious and vulnerable. And the time spent should not only be from the mother but also the father should always strive as much as the mother. For example,my husband had been helping me throughout my pregnancy right from the moment we could hear the baby's heartbeat, and he had been helping me in every way possible since the birth of the twins, and after that until now after 5 years. Most men usually do not help mothers raise children, but my husband always changes baby diapers every morning. And feeds them at nights and reads stories to them before bedtime. I really appreciate my husband.
Second, having a baby means a lot of money that you have to pay so you have to be in good financial shape to never have trouble. Sometimes people have no money but they want to have a child even they can't pay for the costs of birth hospitalization and sometimes they leave their child on the street when their child gets sick. This is a great injustice to the innocent child who has entered this world at our will. I've never been a mom but for 2 years and half I loved a child that I found her in toilet of restaurant and I called her Samira. she was sick and her parents left her there. She had Mitral Valve problem. Mitral valve problems in infants is a condition in which the mitral valve does not close properly and allows blood to flow back into the heart. all those 2 years and half, we tried to do our best for her. she had 3 surgery and those surgery helped her to live more but not more enough. I didn't bring her into the world, but every time I remember her my tears run ... she was really small and oppressed and very beautiful. I always think that if his main family were rich, would they still leave her? I don't think people are so cruel. Of course, she was happy with us for the whole two years and thought we were her family. The sadness of losing her always stays in our hearts.
In conclusion, Mothers' fathers must help raise their children in all circumstances and strive to provide the best for their children. Wish all children could live in a peaceful world one day.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, still, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37972166998 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19705759479 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497017892644 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0912366161 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9655172414 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3448275862 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03448275862 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0283660430381 0.236089414692 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00783478790244 0.076458572812 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192507491837 0.0737576698707 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0204182760654 0.150856017488 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166667832171 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.43 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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