Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy.
I agree with the speaker's claim to the extent that public figures should indeed get prepared that their privacy is to be exposed. The world around us composed of the people that we are familiar with and those public people who appear in everyone's eyes. They come to the public to lead a country, company or an organization, or to lead public trend or fashion. Therefore, it's predictable that they will be discussed by a great number of people.
Admittedly, discussion of public figures' privacy is not good behavior. Privacy is the basic right for everybody, no matter whether he is in public or not. As a consequence, the people who do not respect the right for the public people shall be punished for their invasion of other's privacy. For example, the one who photos the house of an entrepreneur without his permission may be sued. Also, it's not encouraged to investigate a famous start mirage condition if he does not intend to publish it.
However, there are some situations that some of the privacy of public people be exposed. A president, for example, is not only a president, but also a representation of his country, and the people of his country. Therefore, when he was competing for president, he had to tell the people about some of his privacy such as his age, his working experience, his wealth, his political stand, etc.. Only in this way could the people determine whether his suitable to represent them and their country. And a famous star, for another example, has to aware that he's not only a star, but also the connection of the group of people who are his fans. As the center of the group, he provides the information for the people for communication and entertainment. These informations can be some privacy of this star, such as his mirage, his life status, and his daily routine. These informations are needed because that is the way people communicate.
Therefore, in the situation that the public people needed to provide some personal privacy for the good development of his country, company or the community, they should be aware that it's a rather normal thing from the position they have chosen. But there are other situations that the people use the privacy to create rumor, and to criticize, and to bear malice to the public figures, which should not be bared.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 41, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...However, there are some situations that some of the privacy of public people be exposed. A ...
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Line 9, column 391, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...ce, his wealth, his political stand, etc.. Only in this way could the people deter...
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Line 9, column 554, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
... for another example, has to aware that hes not only a star, but also the connectio...
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Line 13, column 185, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...he community, they should be aware that its a rather normal thing from the position...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80150753769 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68013086189 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449748743719 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0677435074 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.578947368 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238896948337 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087653963778 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662326746685 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183577481521 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787975753553 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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