Topic: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music?
Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Across human history, music has been considered as the most principal creation of humankind. Collectively, music which is evolutionary in numerous forms is widely representative of people’s moods and characteristics. However, concerning the issue that music is spreading throughout countries nowadays and it seems to be straightforwardly admitted by people, especially the youngsters. It is believed that conventional music should be cared for and protected and as a result, the traditional tune should be treated more significant than international music. Following are further explanation to classify my rendered opinion.
In the first place, human thoughts and emotions are complicated and kept varying. Music is recognised as advantage measure that is extremely useful for people’s relaxation. It helps to stabilise people’s mood whenever people need motivation, calming or joyful. Secondly, the music is also used as an efficient instrument of propaganda of governments. Governments utilize benefits of music to drive awareness of people on things that they desire to. Taking everything into account, music take a great vital part of people's lives undoubtedly.
On the other hand, music is utmost influenced by specific nation’s culture. Convervative people claim that international music is replacing conventional tune that is unacceptable. In addition, they support to the popularity of traditional music against the intensify invasion of international music. Their rationale is about protection of national values and cultures. This point is valid due to the fact that some worldwide music which has unsuitable lyrics are singing daily by youngsters. Unfortunately, which music tendency is more important to other is decided by its users who are listening to and even feel it everyday. To answer the thesis statement above, whether international music is lesser importance than traditional music, should be placed in the specific views and different types of people. It is definitely a big “yes” for conservative people or old folks, and it is certainly a “no” answer for youngsters.
In conclusion, the problems and causes mentioned would not be all due to time and length limit. The thought provoking nature of this issue should need further consideration, more academically and thoroughly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...s who are listening to and even feel it everyday. To answer the thesis statement above, ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eople or old folks, and it is certainly a 'no' answer for youngsters. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82183908046 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.52153032769 2.80592935109 126% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58908045977 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6096545897 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38710014378 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118042587109 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996037191612 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217043783161 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123368468393 0.056905535591 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.18 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.