TPO35_task2
In today modern era, famous people are important to the society since most of the people pattern them as a role model. While some people believe that celebrities had chosen to be at the center of attentions, I am of the opinion that without shadows of any doubt, all people including celebrities and famous ones deserve privacy in their personal lives. In most of the societies, boundaries of privacy had declined for famous people, today. To provide the better life for both people and societies, it is better to increase this privacy. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
To begin with, privacy is a vital element for both celebrities and their families. Today, social activities have wide-spread impact on people’s lives. These activities boost rumors in the society, and take away celebrities privacy and cause personal problems in their families. One of the most famous actors in my country is a compelling example to clarify this. Two years ago, an actor in my city had a secret relation with a girl from another country. His fans saw him with his girlfriend during summer in another country, and posted photos of them. As a result he got so sad and angry since he did not have any privacy and the ones he did not want had become aware of the girl. Having a lot of problems with his family because of the girl, he decided to move to another country and don’t play movies any more.
Another equally significant point is that devoting the big part of the society budget to producing news about personal life of celebrities, is kind of wasting money, and has bad effects on the culture of the people. Moreover, they would be less aware of important news forming their future like political topics. They would get used to follow some void of meaning news and rumors instead of important information which is crucial for the success of society. To illustrate, last week I heard some news about my teacher who is a well-known person on Instagram, and this news did not have any value but bad effects. As a result all his students get involved to the news, and continued talking behind him without listening to him as a teacher to learn something.
All in all, due attention to aforementioned reasons, I tend to argue that like other people, celebrities need privacy to have better lives. Moreover, producing news from null information is just kind of waste of time and money that reduces the level of culture of the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...st rumors in the society, and take away celebrities privacy and cause personal problems in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, well, while, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7632183908 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56886651562 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512643678161 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2987590613 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.6 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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